jackfinn Male • 29 • Boone, NC • United States

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I'm into... Writing Film Art Mind Activism
I'm working on... A novel(la) tentatively entitled Under the Red, White, and Blue. The prologue and the first few chapters are posted here. I'd love to know what you think (preferably by message... but you can slag me publically, too).

Just another struggling writer...

Last On: 07/03/08 PST

Interests

Interests

,Writing ... Hiking ... Drinking ... Traveling ... Making Art... Ellipses ... Reading,

Writers (just a few)

,Haruki Murakami,Fitzgerald,Hemingway,Gertrude Stein,Robert Lowell,Denis Johnson,Ian McEwan,Adrienne Rich,Sharon Olds (read her open letter to Laura Bush some time & you'll understand why),Wallace Stevens,Tolstoy,Turgenev,Doestoyevsky,Raymond Carver,Raymond Chandler,Philip K. Dick,Ken Kesey,and a whole bunch of others who if I were to continue to list I'd feel even more pompous...,

Musicians (again, just a few)

,Here's the thing -- I like honesty and risk in my music. The Grateful Dead (not so much the Dead,though),Bob Dylan,Ryan Adams & the Cardinals,Wilco,Black Flag,Uncle Tupelo,Van Morrison,Reindeer Section (but not Snow Patrol),Coltrane,Naked Gods,The Band,Thelonious,Phil and Friends,Miles Davis,Fugazi,Wu Tang Clan,Tupac Shakur,and a few others who I'm too embarassed to admit to liking (like Bruce Hornsby)...,

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Jul 01, 2008 - 03:19 PM PST

jacy

I really enjoyed this...this I know because I did not want it to end. Nice job.

May 12, 2008 - 03:03 PM PST

toru

So much to comment on. You developed this idea very well. I'm happy I read the draft and now the more finished piece. There's a point where you say you won't describe the evening's jokes because what follows was more important. I think you should describe those jokes, and reference them. Instead of telling us what to think, describe the workings and form a 'thesis' by selective narration, let us think for ourselves, and give more depth to your piece. flesh that part out. Also- develop the link between E and Paris more/ also the link with the boots. The boots symbolize soemthing more than hairy legs and female comradory- we need to see somehow that Lucy is representing a particular type of fashion, that is ever bit as false as paris's fashion. And that this girl is too, passing out drunk at a get together. somehow that is important, but its not a connection we make- we need to see that lucy is similiar and differnt too, and we need to understand her as perfect in chris's mind

Apr 29, 2008 - 07:40 PM PST

berryb83

really beautiful story... don't really have the words to explain how beautiful...

Apr 29, 2008 - 03:37 PM PST

dex2988

jackfinn

hey man, thanks for listening. your forum comments have been right on point all along. glad to have you on the site.

Apr 28, 2008 - 09:06 PM PST

fen

Awesome, a good angle on the subject

Apr 28, 2008 - 02:54 PM PST

luluc

i really enjoyed this! i like your writing.

Apr 25, 2008 - 08:59 AM PST

greeneyeliner

This is really interesting, my boyfriend and I recently watched this debate with commentary by Ron Jeremy about porn and the affect it has on people's lives and how it sort of desensitizes you, maybe it might give you some more info for you story? I found the clips on www.reddit.com

Apr 24, 2008 - 10:00 PM PST

brianbunnell

i think the movie referred to here (not that it has anything to do with the piece) is "kill bill." great, great piece, jack. the logical tracks and transitions through them are fantastic. very emotional, and very true.

Apr 24, 2008 - 02:55 PM PST

jadebug

Wow, I found this to be a very well written, well thought out piece of work. This was just awesome!!! I saw the headline and was just like what...but kept reading...I guess waiting for disgusting comments or the typical guy response to porn (which sorta came thru the comments about Chris, but not really)...so I kept reading...awesome very awesome. Thanks for sharing this and I'd like to see the finished product as well, make sure you post it!!! :)

Apr 24, 2008 - 01:51 PM PST

Franchise

The movie you are referring to is M. Night Shyamalan's Unbreakable. The villain (Samuel L. Jackson) of the story relates the Superman alter ego to the hero (Bruce Willis). As far as porn goes, whatever floats your boat man.

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Jun 03, 2008

I cleared my portfolio a couple of days ago. Those pieces are posted under My Works but not My Portfolio.

Why?

Because sometimes I hate the stuff I write and don't want to have to see it.
Because sometimes I've revised a piece and am embarassed by the last draft.
Because sometimes I fixate and agonize over this book and seeing those "completed" pieces reminds me how far I still have to go.
Because sometimes I don't want to look back, I want to go further.
And because sometimes I want to quit and walk away, but don't have the testicular fortitude to do so.

I'm hoping to post a complete draft of the book (my third draft) by the end of the summer. Until then, this will be the last piece I add to My Portfolio... though My Works may still get some action.

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