3bestfriends | Okemos, MI  • United States , Age 14

A Steady Beat



Apr 03, 2008 - 18:49 PM PST

Life is like a heartbeat
Beating
Moving
Changing
The needle on the machine moving in a patterned motion
As the line moves up
Your life is changing
You’re laughing
You’re loving
You’re living
Things are happy
Friends are close
Good times are flowing through your life faster than a piece of driftwood down the rapids
Then comes the down beat
It plummets
Only a moment ago you were laughing carelessly
Now you cry
Depressed
Sobered
You feel as if life couldn’t get any worse
People are dying
Feeling the pain that others have endured for the longest time
These cold doses of reality drag you down from your high
But things are improving
Gradually you see those around you
How much they care
How much they mean to you
That maybe your life isn’t so bad
Why get hung up on the little things in life
Look ahead
Look forward
Look to tomorrow
Now you’re back to the flat line
Your life isn’t great, but not bad either
It is normal and you just want it to stay there
But that can’t last long
In what seems is a few seconds, but spans over a few days
You’ve gone back up
Nothing can go wrong with you now
Now that you are so high
But of course that’s wrong
By the time I finish this next verse
You will be on your way crashing down
And then the pattern repeats
This is life
It is so unbelievably fair
For every up there is a down
No good comes without a bad
And finally when your time has expired
Your life is easing to the last stop
And as the driver finally releases the brakes
Asking you to exit carefully
Keep in mind that your life was fair
You had good times and bad times
Finally, once you make that step off the bus
You have flat lined
No happier and no worse than when you entered this world
Life isn’t going to bend in your favor
It’s fair to everyone
Everyone has there term
So when you see your stop coming up
Step off the bus with your head held high
Knowing that you were no more benefited then others
But you can say that you made it through living hell
And life couldn’t have been better to you
But it was fair to you
Just completely throughout it all, fair…
Ba dump
Ba dump
Ba dump
Ba… dump…
-Keenan, tell me wht u think and constructive criticism is great to hear

Title: A Steady Beat
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Added: 04-03-2008
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Apr 04, 2008 - 04:45 AM
Hey this is really good!! I had no clue that you wrote? The only thing I would suggest would be in the second and third line, they both end with the word motion. I know writers do that sometimes intentially but it wasn't super clear if that was some literacy thingy or just a...idk...just sayin. Then again I'm not a writer so I wouldn't know!! ;)

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